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The graph below shows the proprotion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2024 in three different countries.

The graph below shows the proprotion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2024 in three different countries.
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The illustration presents the
porportion
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proportion
 of the
population
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 aged 65 and over from 1940 and the estimation for 2040 in three different countries.
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, every country has an increasing rate of elderly people every year. The percentages at the beginning and end
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 more than 25 years apart. Each country's percentage increase
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rapidly
 in the 2030s. From 1940 to 1980, the
USA
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 and
Sweden
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 had a significant increase rate of elderly people, accounting for 10 to 15
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percent
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 and 8 to 14
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percent
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in
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order. In 2000, the
USA
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 percentage
has been
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 stable
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rise
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 up to 23
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percent
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 in 2040. In 2000,
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Sweden
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Sweden's
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 elderly
population
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 remains relatively high but stable, slightly above the
USA
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. In 2020, the
population
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 begins to increase more noticeably,
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reflecting
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 an
aging
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population
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. In 2040,
Sweden
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's elderly
population
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 countries to
rise
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, though at a slower pace compared to
Japan
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, indicating ongoing demographic
aging
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 but not as rapidly as in
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japan
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Japan
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. In 2000,
Japan
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experiences
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 a significant
rise
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,
supassing
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surpassing
 both
Sweden
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 and the
USA
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 where the
population
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remain
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remained
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 relatively stable. In 2020,
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Japan
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Japan's
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 elderly
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percent
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percentage
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rise
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rose
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up stable and overtake the
USA
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 and
Sweden
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 in 2040.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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