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The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world, personal success is determined by many factors. Education is limited to academic pursuits and
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 learners
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the valuable
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 necessary to be successful.
This
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 essay agrees that students should carry out social services or work experiences alongside their studies to
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 valuable
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qualities
 and
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, employers are looking for soft
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 rather than academic qualifications. Many graduates have a similar high grade
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 of their courses, so what let their job application stand out are qualities
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 resilience and empathy. Many young
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 in developed countries
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 example,
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volunteering
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 social services in their free time to support
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people
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 the meaning of sacrifice and
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appreciate more what they have.
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,
it is clear that
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 experience can enrich
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 important
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 to be
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successful
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, working experience can help
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 to develop fundamental
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 to reach fame. Good communication
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 are essential to communicate clearly and effectively with
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colleagues
 and clients, developing ideas and addressing concerns. In customer service jobs
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 a worthwhile tool for
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 clients' fidelity. Leadership is another valuable skill that
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 the individual to work collaboratively with others, delegate tasks and drive the team towards success.
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 it
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 apparent that
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 and qualities required to
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 successful cannot be learned at school. In conclusion, successful
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 are compound with academic knowledge, qualities and
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Althoungh
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education institutions provide young
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 with them, the other requirements necessary need to be learned outside classrooms.
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 that volunteering and job experiences can enrich individuals,
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guiding
 them towards success.

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grammar
Work on sentence structure to avoid awkward phrasing. Ensure subject-verb agreement and proper tense usage throughout the essay. For example: 'Education is limited to academic pursuits and do not teaches learners...' is incorrect. Consider: 'and does not teach learners...'.
content
Clarify your main ideas by elaborating on your points with more specific examples or explanations. This will make your arguments more compelling and easier to follow.
coherence
Ensure consistent use of connectors and linking words to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs. Examples like 'Therefore' and 'Thus' help, but should be used consistently and appropriately.
task response
The essay provides a comprehensive response to the task, addressing the relevance of both academic and non-academic skills for success.
structure
A clear introduction and conclusion frame the essay well, making the main argument easy to understand.
content
The essay includes relevant examples, such as volunteering and work experience, to support the argument.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Real-world experience
  • Adaptability
  • Resilience
  • Networking
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Creative thinking
  • Innovation
  • Self-learning
  • Continuous improvement
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Empathy
  • Traditional academic settings
  • Academic curricula
  • Structured nature
  • Lifelong learning
  • Rapidly changing industries
  • Leadership
  • Teamwork
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