The chart below shows information about calorie consumption in seven countries in 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about calorie consumption in seven countries in 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the average
of
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apply
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calorie
consumption in seven countries including
United
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the United
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States
, India, New Zealand, Somalia, China, Spain and Indonesia, in 2003.
Overall
, the United
States
has the highest average
calorie
consumption,
while
Indonesia, which had less than half the average
calorie
take
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intake
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of the United
States
and New Zealand, had the lowest average
calorie
consumption of all eight countries. We can
saw
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see
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the United
States
, consuming nearly 3400 calories, had the highest average, and just after that, New Zealand was in second place by 3300 calories
while
The other six countries were consuming significantly fewer calories.
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