In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Most of
villagers
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the villagers
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are changing their accommodations from villages to cities all around the world.
As a result
of
this
countryside
residents are lower than
town
areas.I think
this
is a negative development and in
this
essay, I will elaborate my perspectives
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this
situation, my take on
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of
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the
facilities
between the
town
and the village. As an example, there are lots of shopping centres in the city
such
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household
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items, clothes, stationeries, vehicles and so on.
Conversely
, developed educational centres, schools,
hospitals
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and hospitals
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with enough
facilities
are
also
at
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the urban areas.
Nevertheless
, there are lots of companies and unlimited job opportunities in the city area.
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, mostly there are continuous electricity, gas,water and well planned and punctual transport system as well. So people prefer to live
in
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comfortably and
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to cities as they possible.
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, villagers and
town
people's
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people
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have
same
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the same
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basic
need
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needs
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Such
as food, accommodation, education, good health and freedom as well. In some
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there is unavailable electricity in the
countryside
.
Also
, there is
poor
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transport system, teachers and
facilities
at village schools.
Moreover
, sometimes not enough medications and human resources. So
countryside
people preferred to move to
town
.
Finally
,
countryside
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the countryside
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population decreased and urbanisation in cities. In a nutshell, if there
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as usual same
facilities
all over the city and rural areas,
as
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there is lots of freedom in the
countryside
. My point of view is around the world
this
point is most prominent in developing countries.
Submitted by amalitharangani0Most of villagers are changing their accommodations from villages to cities all around the world. As a result of this countryside residents are lower than town areas.I think this is a negative development and in this essay, I will elaborate my perspectives furthermore. According to this situation, my take on this is, different of the facilities between the town and the village. As an example, there are lots of shopping centres in the city such as house- hold items, clothes, stationeries, vehicles and so on. Conversely, developed educational centres, schools, hospitals with enough facilities are also at the urban areas. Nevertheless, there are lots of companies and unlimited job opportunities in the city area. Also, mostly there are continuous electricity, gas,water and well planned and punctual transport system as well. So people prefer to live in comfortably and moving to cities as they possible. Additionally, villagers and town people's have same basic need. Such as food, accommodation, education, good health and freedom as well. In some countries there is unavailable electricity in the countryside. Also, there is poor transport system, teachers and facilities at village schools. Moreover, sometimes not enough medications and human resources. So countryside people preferred to move to town. Finally, countryside population decreased and urbanisation in cities. In a nutshell, if there is as usual same facilities all over the city and rural areas,as there is lots of freedom in the countryside . My point of view is around the world this point is most prominent in developing countries. on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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