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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

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Throughout the years there has been a
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profound
 rise in tourism.
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lead
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 to
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 being the most dominate
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language
 on the planet. It is believed that
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 if
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countines
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continues
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English
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 will be the only
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sopken
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spoken
 in the world.
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essay
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 will discuss the
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positive
 and negative aspects of speaking one
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 worldwide. A main benefit would be smooth communication among humans. Speaking in one
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language
 will allow
people
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 to comprehend each other with ease.
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, It would avoid unnecessary
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conflicts
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 for
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individuals
 as they will be able to convey the correct meaning , preventing any miscommunication among each other.
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, in
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. A vast variety of languages are spoken, but only a handful are able to understand. nations can overcome the
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barrier
. A major downside would be the loss of identity in
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.
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, by
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preferring
 to speak in one
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language
,
people
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 will start to wither from their native
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.
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 resulting in
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disappearing
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 of languages. If only
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english
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 is spoken in the world
then
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 it would lack
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diversity
 in cultures.
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 could result in
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 in Tourism as
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 will have the same nations and there will be no reason to travel.
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 could destroy countries that
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rely
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 economically on Tourism. In conclusion,
English
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 becoming the main
language
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 will be beneficial in
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communication
 among
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.
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, it will lead to a world with no
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 and every country will lose
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their
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 identity and
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.

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task achievement
Work on providing more relevant and specific examples to support your points. This will help to make your ideas clearer and more convincing.
task achievement
Ensure that your main points are fully developed and supported throughout the essay. This includes elaborating on the consequences of having a single global language.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your essay. Try to connect your ideas more smoothly and logically from one point to the next.
coherence cohesion
Review and refine your introduction and conclusion to better summarize and encapsulate your main arguments. This will help strengthen the overall cohesion of your essay.
task achievement
Your essay clearly addresses the topic and provides a balanced discussion of both the advantages and disadvantages of a single global language.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion which frame your essay well.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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