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The provided line chart depicts the rate of citizens living in urban spaces of four countries in Asia over the course of 70 years, beginning from 1970

The provided line chart depicts the rate of citizens living in urban spaces of four countries in Asia over the course of 70 years, beginning from 1970
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The provided line chart depicts the
rate
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 of citizens living in urban spaces of four countries in Asia over the course of 70
years
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, beginning from 1970, with the estimation of growth from 2030 to 2040. Generally, it can be seen obviously that all the four mentioned nations have an upward trend in terms of urbanization
rate
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.
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 the number of individuals staying in urban areas in Malaysia experiences a significant growth,
this
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 proportion in Thailand illustrates the least rise compared to
other
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the other
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 three countries. To be more specific, the urban
rate
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 of Malaysia fluctuated between
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first and
the
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second place between 1970 through 1990,
then
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 taking the lead in the year 2000 and being forecasted
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first place until the end of the aforementioned period.
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, the Philippines showed the same trend
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 Malaysia in the first 20
years
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, but slightly went down in the next 20
years
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 and rose gradually until 2040. Regarding
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, despite having the smallest
rate
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 of urbanization in the beginning,
this
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rate
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 had a positive change,
rocketting
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rocketing
 by nearly 40
percent
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 in 2020 and being expected to climb up to over 60 in the next 20
years
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.
On the other hand
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, the urban
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 proportion of Thailand evidenced development but not remarkable, making
this
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 country rank fourth place and having a modest percentage of over 40 in the end.
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