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With an increasing population communicating via the Internet and text-messaging, face-to-face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The accessibility to
internet
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 accelerates the use of
text-messaging
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text messaging
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 to the
detritment
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detriment
 of face-to-face
communication
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 essay explains why I agree
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this
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 statement by revolving around two main reasons:
text-messaging
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text messaging
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 is faster and safer, and face-to-face
communication
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 is more demanding.
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 of
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all
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, the increasing use of social media like Facebook,
Whattsapp
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WhatsApp
 and
Instragram
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Instagram
brought
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 the population to become more familiar with less formal communications. In fact, exchanging messages is faster and easier than talking.
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, it keeps a sort of distance which secures a kind of privacy during any conversations.
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 one-to-one conversations are more intimate and direct, in the past few years, younger generations
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 more confident
to find
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in finding
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 a partner through applications like Tinder.
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 a safe chat that
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 the premises of the relationship. Another reason related to the spread of
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text messaging
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 is that, in comparison to face-to-face
communication
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, is more easy-going. Certainly,
real
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life
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 meetings are nicer but undoubtedly more demanding.
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, in the current highly performative
life
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 conditions, it has become more difficult to arrange an encounter
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 the growing commitments people entail in their everyday
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life
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. Specifically, the flexibility that contemporary
life
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 has imposed has determined more precarious
life
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 conditions.
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 means that it prevents
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 fixed free time for setting plans with friends and family. In conclusion, despite face-to-face
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 more effective and direct,
text-messaging
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text messaging
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 has become predominant because the benefits it offers
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 as speed and safety are required in our times.
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Ensure all paragraphs are fully developed and clearly support your main argument.
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Try to improve the clarity of your examples to make your argument more compelling and relatable.
coherence cohesion
While the essay has a logical structure, transitions between ideas and paragraphs could be smoother for better readability.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly lays out the writer’s position and outlines the main reasons to be discussed.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and restates the writer's agreement with the statement.
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The use of contemporary examples like social media platforms makes the essay relevant and relatable.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face communication
  • digital means
  • non-verbal cues
  • body language
  • facial expressions
  • context and emotions
  • online communication
  • misunderstandings
  • immediate feedback
  • social connection
  • virtual reality
  • human element
  • confidentiality
  • augment
  • deeper personal connections
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