The charts below illustrate the market share of different smartphone brands in Russia and the amount imports that occurred in three consecutive years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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table and pie charts give information about the market distribution of cellphone brands and the sum of imported

smartphones

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in 2020, 2021 and 2022 in Russia.

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it is clear that

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the portion of

Iphones

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iPhones

among the population has increased over the period, and the quota of

Samsung

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phones decreased. Considering the statistics in 2020,

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all

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quantity of imported

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composed

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343

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units,

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percent

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belongs to

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iPhones

, and the other 34

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is for

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other brands like Google Pixel,

OnePlus

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and OnePlus

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got almost 16 and 12

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percent

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of all market

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, respectively; and,

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, the other brand’s smartphone

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was 3

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percent

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of all

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. In regards to 2021,

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this

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year Apple and Google Pixel

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distribution increased to 40 and 29

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percent

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, correspondingly.

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Russia,

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Samsung

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and OnePlus quota in

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,being distributed by the former brand

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at 21

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percent

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and the latter’s

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composed 9

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percent

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, the classification of Other got only 1

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percent

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of all

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, and the number of imported

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was 670

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. In terms of 2022, the amount of

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bought from abroad has decreased to 430

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phones. And the pie chart of market

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showed a significant portion of

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iPhones

(45%), Google Pixel (23%) and

Samsung

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(19%).

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, about 43

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phones were from OnePlus, and 12,900 thousand were from other brands.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words smartphones, samsung, million, percent, share with synonyms.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

233 words

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