The charts below show the residential water use in 1988 and 2008

The charts below show the residential water use in 1988 and 2008
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The pie charts below illustrate the use of residential water by proportion in 1988 and 2008.
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, exactly half of the figures increased and 3 figures decreased. In 1988 kitchen got the lowest
percentage
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,
while
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in 2008
this
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index was the leader. Garden in 1988 was the fifth one by
percantage
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percentage
,
however
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, it fell dramatically and had 7
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, which gave
to
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him
last
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place in 2008. The kitchen rose approximately
twised
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twisted
. More precisely
this
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figure
had
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15
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in 1988
,
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and analogically had
few
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than 30
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percentage
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. Washing decreased slightly, just by 3
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. In 1988
this
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figure had one of the quarter. Toilets had just above
one fifth
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in 1988. In 2008
this
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index slightly decreased to 4
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and was the second looser
in
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2008. The
last
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figure bathroom, had 22
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in 1988. And slightly increased, and was the second leader in 2008 with 28
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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