The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced.

The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced.
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The given diagram illustrates the process of one type of biofuel whose name is
ethanol
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generated.
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, it is important that Etanol circulation has been passing 9 various stages that start in forests and end in transportation systems that produce carbon.
According to
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the pictures, vegetation, which is the main ingredient of
ethanol
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, needs sunlight and carbon dioxide for growing;
then
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farmers agriculture machines
harvesting
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to harvest
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thes
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these
plants and send them to the factory which has two sections. the first part is pre-processing, which produces cellulose from plants and trees. The graph demonstrates in the second part cellulose passes some prosses and becomes sugars;
thereafter
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, company workers add microbes to sugar inasmuch as a reaction between these elements
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and manufactures
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manufactures
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manufacture
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Ethanol
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, which is a kind of vehicle fuel
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as cars, trucks and so on.
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, machines that use
Ethanol
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for their fuel generate carbon dioxide, the best gas that jangles need for growing.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biomass
  • ethanol
  • fermentation
  • microorganisms
  • yeast
  • carbon dioxide
  • distillation
  • purification
  • dehydration
  • raw materials
  • storage
  • distribution
  • renewable energy
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable fuel
  • concentration
  • impurities
  • alcohol content
  • crop growth
  • conversion process
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