The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced.
The given diagram illustrates the process of one type of biofuel whose name is
ethanol
generated.
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, it is important that Etanol circulation has been passing 9 various stages that start in forests and end in transportation systems that produce carbon.
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According to
the pictures, vegetation, which is the main ingredient of Linking Words
ethanol
, needs sunlight and carbon dioxide for growing; Use synonyms
then
farmers agriculture machines Linking Words
harvesting
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to harvest
thes
plants and send them to the factory which has two sections. the first part is pre-processing, which produces cellulose from plants and trees.
The graph demonstrates in the second part cellulose passes some prosses and becomes sugars; Correct your spelling
these
thereafter
, company workers add microbes to sugar inasmuch as a reaction between these elements Linking Words
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and manufactures
manufactures
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manufacture
Ethanol
, which is a kind of vehicle fuel Use synonyms
such
as cars, trucks and so on. Linking Words
In addition
, machines that use Linking Words
Ethanol
for their fuel generate carbon dioxide, the best gas that jangles need for growing.Use synonyms
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