More and more people are shifting to a plant-based diet. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, in the 21st
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we live in an age and decade when preferences and consciousness
level
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levels
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of individuals in terms of nourishment face significant changes.
As a result
, a multitude of individuals
shift
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from their traditional eating patterns that included meat and animal
products
to
vegetarian
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diet.
This
tendency has versatile circumstances and personally, I sincerely believe that it leads to beneficial
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ramifications
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for society and nature at all.
To begin
with,
it is clear that
products
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that we consume have an overwhelming influence on us and impact on
the
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overall
well-being.
Due to
multifaceted detrimental ramifications
from
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diet that include animal
products
, people shift to organic and natural
products
, which include fruits, vegetables and plants, with noticeable improvements
of
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health
due to
vitamins and all mouth-watering supplements. To cite an example, afterwards of changing
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the type
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of nourishment
health
condition
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conditions
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can face considerable changes, like overcoming obesity, chronic diseases connected with
cardiovascular
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system,
as well as
mental
health
.
Moreover
, society members think about the condition of animals and their feelings, how they struggle because of
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us
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. With
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to the consequences of
this
contemporary tendency, it is evident that
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the vast majority of individuals will have overwhelming and noticeable improvements
on
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the
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physical appearance
of
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them
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.
Furthermore
,
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will be shiny,
clear
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and clear
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, without any abnormalities and pimples.
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metal
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mental
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health
and psychological condition of conscious human beings will face
huge
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variety of changes. Plant-based diet owners
also
tend to have high self-esteem, self-control and resilience, which contribute positively to mental
health
.
Besides
,
due to
anti-inflammatory effects, plant-based food will improve mood and reduce the possibility of depression and anxiety.
To sum up
, avoiding dishes that contain
products
connected with animals
lead
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to beneficial ramifications.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shift
  • plant-based diet
  • adverse environmental impact
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • deforestation
  • health benefits
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • cancer
  • plant-based alternatives
  • ethical concerns
  • animal welfare
  • environmental sustainability
  • traditional farming communities
  • animal agriculture
  • sustainable
  • ethical consumption patterns
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