The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminum cans
The diagram illustrates the process of how recycling
cans
made of aluminium.
In general, that is
the process includes several stages, beginning with collecting thrown cans
and ending with reusing recycled products.
Having looked at the given chart for more details, first of all, recycled trucks collect second-hand cans
from recycled bins. Secondly
, these trucks deliver the cans
to a machine where the cans
are cleaned, sorted, shredded, and compressed. Then
they will be transported to a factory and are heated and melted in the furnace.
Next,
the process continues with the rolling stage, at this
step, the cans
are rolled from 2.5 mm to 6 mm thick depending on customers' demands. These cans
then
undergo recycling into new aluminium cans
. Finally
, they will be printed on some brands and transferred for use and sales purposes. In particular
, the percentage of recycled cans
in the UK goes up to 74%.Submitted by ieltswritingpracticedl on
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