The majority of news is being reported bad news such as wars, famines, accidents, and crime. Why do you think that is? Do you think news should be balanced with good news and bad news?

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of the Reality Absorbe People who choose the reality that systems give us without
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down the chaotic lifestyle.
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many random news on
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. It is usually argued that
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on negative circumstances? Evidence clearly shows that; especially the developing countries occures many various problems
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citizens and these news mainly aim for
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; people who are living on the horror frequency will be easily under their control and
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they don't want to people's gain awareness of
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them many numerous toys that will distract them.
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method of escape. If we
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want to stay under other's control, we need to go beyond other's realities. All things considered; it can be accepted that news
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all the time and we have to carefully choose which networks we are following
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protect our mental health.
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