You have organised to go on holiday with your friend. However, you must change your plans. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: tell them how much you are looking forward to the holiday explain why you must change your plans suggest alternative arrangements

Hi Daniel, I writing to you because I am so happy and so excited that our holiday starting next Monday. But I have
also
bad news for you. We have to change our trip to the island.
Last
week I had an incident on the bike and
unfortunately
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my doctor told me that I could not fly by plane for at least two weeks. So I have a great idea. What do you think if we go to the island by the car? The way to our camp is straightforward and not so far away. The way will take
couple
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of hours but I think we will enjoy the trip much more. We will go through the tropical forests and beautiful hills. Daniel, please let me know as soon as possible if you are happy with my idea and I can organise a nice trip to our dream holiday. I
Think
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that
this
holiday could be our best time ever. Best regards Peter
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task achievement
Work on improving sentence structure for better clarity. For example, 'I writing to you' should be 'I am writing to you.'
coherence cohesion
Ensure the subject-verb agreement is correct. For example, 'our holiday starting' should be 'our holiday is starting.'
suitable writing tone
Clear and suitable writing tone. The letter feels friendly and appropriate for its purpose.
logical structure
Logical flow of ideas and clarity in suggesting alternative arrangements.
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