You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to accommodation office at the college. In the letter, •Describe the situation •Explain your problem and why it is difficult to work •Say what kind of accommodation you would prefer.
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Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing
regarding
Change preposition
apply
this
letter to you to complain about the situation in our college residence which there are several students live
here with me. Wrong verb form
living
Although
I am pleased that we have this
facility, but
unfortunately, I am Remove the conjunction
apply
unconvenient
Correct your spelling
uncomfortable
to live
here for a long time because of some Change the verb form
living
problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
happen
in Wrong verb form
happening
this
place. The first thing that disturb
me is Change the verb form
disturbs
about
the amount of noise Change preposition
apply
Correct pronoun usage
that come
come
from my friends that I Correct subject-verb agreement
comes
could not
stop each night Wrong verb form
cannot
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
me
difficult to study or sleep at night. It Correct pronoun usage
it
make
me feel tired in the morning.
I hope that you can fix Change the verb form
makes
this
important problem as an authorities
in Correct the article-noun agreement
authority
this
college. I suggest that you make some marks in several places to restrict them.
Kind Regards,
nandar
Correct your spelling
Sandra
Bandar
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea. For example, separate the issues from the suggested solutions into different paragraphs.
task achievement
Elaborate more on the situation and provide specific examples for clarity. Also, clarify what you mean by 'marks in several places to restrict them.'
task achievement
Polish the tone to make it more formal and polite to match the context of a complaint letter.
task achievement
The letter effectively addresses the given prompts: describing the situation, explaining the problem, and suggesting a kind of accommodation.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and polite.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.