the graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

the graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
The line graph illustrates the regular monthly change in the cost of copper, nickel, and zinc in 2014.
Overall
,
average
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monthly change in the cost of copper and nickel fell over
the
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time,
whereas
zinc reached its peak in February and experienced some fluctuations over the period As the graph shows , nickel’s average monthly change in the
price
initially
was 6% I. January and considerably decreased to -3% in June ,
meanwhile
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zinc’s regular monthly
price
changes
increased to 3% in February
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and slightly declined to -1% in June. In terms of copper, its average monthly
price
changes
slightly dropped to approximately 0.5% in June.
In contrast
, all metal’s regular monthly
changes
remained
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between July and September.
Moreover
, nickel’s and zinc’s average monthly
price
changes
sharply rocketed to 0.1% and over 1.5% in October and November respectively . Regarding copper’s regular monthly cost
changes
were slightly decreased to over 0,5% in October and November,
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its regular monthly
price
changes
minimally grew to about 1.5% in December
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, changes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 9 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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