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The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map
illustrate
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an
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the
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 infrastructure development of the
town
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 of
Stromer
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 from 1995 until now.
Overall
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, there
are
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is
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an
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apply
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extensive development in the
Stromer
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town
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 where the
town
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 was mainly covered by forest and farmland in 1995, now several buildings have been constructed in some areas of the
town
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.
Initially
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, there were only two local residences and one shop in
the
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Stromer
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city
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City
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. Two residents were located
on
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in
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 the northwest and the centre of the
town
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,
then
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 there was a shop
separated
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separating
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 them.
Furthermore
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, there was a farmland
that is
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 located
on
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in
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 the south of the
town
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while
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 the remaining area was still covered by the forest. After almost 30 years,
Stromer
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town
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 has been developed by establishing several public buildings. There is a school in the centre of the
town
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 which is surrounded by six shops.
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, there is an airport
that is
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 located
on
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in
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 the northeast of the
town
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. On the southern of the
town
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, some farmland areas are
also
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 replaced by
the
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apartments.
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, the local residences are reallocated to the eastern of the
town
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, stromer with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • residential buildings
  • green spaces
  • commercial areas
  • shopping mall
  • parking facilities
  • river
  • marina
  • tourism
  • leisure activities
  • transportation infrastructure
  • roads
  • roundabout
  • access
  • industrial area
  • community center
  • town square
  • residents
  • social interaction
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