Many countries aim to improve their living standard by economic developnent but some important social values are lost as a result. Do you think advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages.

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goal to better their living standards through developing their economy
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it leads to the diminishing of some integral traditional values. There are two advantages to
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of employment and
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the attraction
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of investors.
However
,
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development leads to limited social interactions. The only drawback to economic development is that
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many people will not find time to interact with their families because
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will be employed
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task achievement
Ensure that your essay fully addresses both parts of the question. The essay should weigh the advantages and disadvantages, rather than stating only a few points briefly.
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Develop your points with detailed explanations and specific examples to support your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a logical structure throughout the essay. Each paragraph should have a clear, single focus and should contribute to the overall argument of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a proper introduction and conclusion are present to frame your argument. The introduction should outline the main points you will discuss, and the conclusion should summarize your arguments and provide a final perspective.
introduction conclusion present
The essay starts with a clear statement of the topic and the writer's viewpoint.
task achievement
The topic is relevant and important, which shows awareness of significant contemporary issues.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • living standards
  • economic development
  • infrastructural facilities
  • unemployment
  • poverty levels
  • technological advancements
  • environmental degradation
  • biodiversity
  • income disparities
  • cultural heritage
  • sustainable growth
  • stress levels
  • policy-making
  • mitigate
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