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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers and books because they will be able to read everything they Want without paying.

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Introduction
In recent times,
technology
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 has been far advanced. It provides convenience to their target customers like slothful people and the new generation which rely on mechanism things. I agree, that
technology
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 has changed the pupil's perspective of studying and many things are
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 available digitally free and paid in both versions.
Body paragraph 1
commencing with the most prominent reason, in today's era, Pupils benefit from the advancement of
technology
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 like Artificial intelligence (AI). why Al?
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. Al is convenient for
students
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 to help them out with their assignments, prepare for exams and provide all study resources through e-books.
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, the e-book is beneficial for
students
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 with financial instability
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, Al is a virtual assistant for pupils who prefer to study privately rather than in an institute.
Body paragraph 2
Another worth considering reason is, in future, everything will be transformed digitally including Newspaper and Books.
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, these webmedia amended charges for the latest news and for the digital e-book. Other than that, a few outdated books will be widely available for free on common websites.
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, nowadays, OTT platforms like Netflix, and Prime Video charge a subscription for the latest movie but after a few months that film will be available for free on platforms like YouTube and a few other underrated OTT Platforms.
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, elderly people like, Grandfathers or ancestors will have the perks of advancement in
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, they will enjoy daily news through phones without waiting for physical newspapers to arrive.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the inclusion of
technology
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 has enhanced
students
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' ability to learn.
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, elderly people will be able to receive news earlier than before.
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, AI has contributed on a large scale to
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 advancement, like helping
students
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 virtually 24\7.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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