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Writing Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows some design principles for an energy-efficient house and how they work in different climates. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

Writing Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows some design principles for an energy-efficient house and how they work in different climates. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The figures show some design principles of a house with the aim
to increase
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 the
eficiency
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efficiency
 of energy usage and
to illustrate
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illustrating
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 the way
of
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apply
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every layout
working
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works
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 in different types of climates.
Overall
, there are two main seasons including cool and warm climates. In the lower
temperature
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temperatures
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, the building seems to be storage heat.
Whereas
, in the warmer situation, the
bulding
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building
 leads to
release
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the release
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it
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of it
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. Looking at the information in
detial
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detail
, it can be seen that in the cool season, thermal materials are applied to allow
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the bulding
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bulding
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building
 to
storage
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 heat.
Therefore
, there is a big window which faces directly to the sun in order
to
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 light
can
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pass the wall.
In
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 the opposite side of
window
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the window
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,
developer
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the developer
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 establishes an insulation system to reduce heat loss.
Thus
,
this
 will stay warm even in
the
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heavy rain or snow.  The second design consists of two primary designs.
Fistly
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Firstly
, in the days of hot climate, there are covers
in
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on
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 every side of
wall
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the wall
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 to ensure that sunlight can not enter the inside of
room
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a room
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.
In addition
, external insulation plus reflection are installed to reduce the high temperature.
By contrast
, when night comes, windows as
a
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ventilation are opened to maximise the air
curculation
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circulation
.
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