You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to accommodation office at the college. In the letter, •Describe the situation •Explain your problem and why it is difficult to work •Say what kind of accommodation you would prefer.

Dear Sir, I am writing to express my
annoyant
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annoyance
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my
roomates
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roommates
. My room number is 609, which is located on
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floor and near by lifts. I have two
roomates witih
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roommates with
me,
we
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and we
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are
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different
subject
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, they are both
study
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the
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PTE and I am study
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degree
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education.
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year is my
last
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hard to finish my
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thesis
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I have to wake up quite early and start to write my theory in the early morning.
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, I am writing my books very late as well. But my
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roommates
are unhappy with my lifetable, because they are freshman
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so
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they always wake up late and come back to
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room
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late
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. When I
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my
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routine day
, they are
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always
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sleeping
. We have tried to
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solving
this
problem and adjust our
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site
opposite
lifetable. After
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of days, my
roomates
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roommates
were
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back
to their
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orange
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life again. Now, we
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both
agree
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with
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to
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change
roomates
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roommates
as soon as
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possible
. So if you would
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enough to help us change new
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roommates
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best thing to do for us. Yours sincerely By Evelyn
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task achievement
Work on spelling and grammatical accuracy to improve clarity and readability.
coherence and cohesion
Develop a clearer structure with distinct paragraphs for each main point.
task achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task and provided a complete response.
suitable writing tone
Polite and respectful tone is maintained throughout the letter.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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