Some people think that parents should teach their children about the importance of recycling. Others believe recycling should be taught in schools. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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kids
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should
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recycling
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from
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their
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another group of
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believe that
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are
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to be taught by
schools
. In my opinion recycling habit should
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be taught either in
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in houses. Indeed, in our times, most
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people
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that resources in our world
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not eternal and
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their own homelands.
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, a group of
people
decided to take
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their
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and lead our world to
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existence.
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data to save the world,
this
data is to be shared. Many
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children
that
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are growing up right now
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not
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thaughts
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would be pretty good if
parents
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them to recycle. Of
cource
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course
, most
of
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parents
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the parents
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conversating
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with their
children
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and
this
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simple rules are to be said to
children
.
On the other hand
,
schools
are more cooperated and
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crowd
crowded
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communicated
communicate
with
children
during the
lessons
, break times and extra activities.
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, there is
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big
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amount of
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data
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giving
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nowaday
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nowadays
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schools
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in schools
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.
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information is to be changed to recycling
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worth certain
lessons
for
such
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stuff
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staff
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,
director
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and active faces in school should do something like events or posts below
school
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the school
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entrance.
For example
in some
schools
of India, there are plenty of various activities that
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to not rubbishing outside in any place, there
is
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certain
lessons
and
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something
like punishes
to
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those who rubbish in
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place.
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way,
schools
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more potential.
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, there
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not
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special places to teach something, there
is
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such
people
who
teaches
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to
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us to
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recycle. In my opinion, both
schools
and
parents
are to give basic
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knowledge
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in
this
theme.
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