Some people think that parents should teach their children about the importance of recycling. Others believe recycling should be taught in schools. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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task achievement

Your essay covers both viewpoints and provides an opinion, but the arguments need further development and clarity to improve the score.

task achievement

Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting details. At times, your points lack depth or clear explanation.

coherence cohesion

Improve your coherence by structuring your essay logically. Make sure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Using linking phrases will help make your essay more cohesive.

coherence cohesion

Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which provides a sense of closure.

task achievement

You have addressed both views in the discussion, which indicates a comprehensive approach to the task.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Mobile phones have brought many benefits, but they have also had negative effects. Do the disadvantages of having mobile phones outweigh the advantages?

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