write a review about a place. use imperative verbs to give advice people what they can see and do there.

Hello, welcome to the beautiful
village
of Masuleh.
This
is a very beautiful and historical place. You can enjoy the beautiful nature and traditional houses here. There are traditional markets inside the
village
where you can buy souvenirs and eat at various restaurants with local dishes. Masoleh
village
also
has a beautiful river which is located at the bottom of the
village
. Please do not throw garbage inside the
village
so that we can preserve its beauty.
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positive
You have successfully provided a lovely description of Masuleh village, its attractions, and some useful tips for visitors.
task achievement
Try to expand more on each point to clearly convey the fascinating aspects of the place.
coherence cohesion
Your essay will benefit from a more defined introduction and conclusion to frame your ideas and give proper closure.
task achievement
Include more specific examples or highlights about the places to visit within the village to make your description richer and more engaging.
content
Your essay gives a clear picture of the village and its offerings, which makes it inviting for readers.
structure
You have used imperative verbs effectively to provide advice to visitors.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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