write a review about a place. use imperative verbs to give advice people what they can see and do there.

Hello, welcome to the beautiful

village

of Masuleh.

This

is a very beautiful and historical place. You can enjoy the beautiful nature and traditional houses here. There are traditional markets inside the

village

where you can buy souvenirs and eat at various restaurants with local dishes. Masoleh

village

also

has a beautiful river which is located at the bottom of the

village

. Please do not throw garbage inside the

village

so that we can preserve its beauty.

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positive

You have successfully provided a lovely description of Masuleh village, its attractions, and some useful tips for visitors.

task achievement

Try to expand more on each point to clearly convey the fascinating aspects of the place.

coherence cohesion

Your essay will benefit from a more defined introduction and conclusion to frame your ideas and give proper closure.

task achievement

Include more specific examples or highlights about the places to visit within the village to make your description richer and more engaging.

content

Your essay gives a clear picture of the village and its offerings, which makes it inviting for readers.

structure

You have used imperative verbs effectively to provide advice to visitors.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

1 paragraphs

77 words

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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write a review about a place. use imperative verbs to give advice people what they can see and do there.

Include an introduction and conclusion

ome people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education, and that government should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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