The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The
chrart
illustrates three methods of receiving Correct your spelling
chart
inquiries
in tourist
information office in a specific city for 6 months in 2011.
Correct article usage
a tourist
It is clear that
people had
made Correct pronoun usage
who had
inquiries
in person
increased dramatically over six-month
period. Add an article
a six-month
In
addition
Add a comma
addition,
inquiries
by letter or email had a decreasing trend during the period.
Overall
, in person
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person,
inquiries
increased as by telephone did too. In January 2011, in
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in-person
person
was the lowest at a figure of roughly 450 whereas
telephone was the highest rating 900
. As technologies improved, the number of Change preposition
at 900
inquiries
by telephone rose from 900 in January to 1600 in June 2011. In addition
, number
of Change the article
a number
the number
inquiries
in person
had a sharp increase from 450 to 1900 during the period which was more than a
triple.
Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, amount of inquiries
by letter or email was the only method which had a decreasing tendency during 6 month
. From January to March the figure maintained stable at around 750 but it started to fall steeply in April and May as people writing letters and emails declined generally. In June it remained stable at approximately 380.Change to a plural noun
months
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