The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information 

Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make 

comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The
chrart
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chart
illustrates three methods of receiving
inquiries
in
tourist
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a tourist
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information office in a specific city for 6 months in 2011.
It is clear that
people
had
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who had
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made
inquiries
in
person
increased dramatically over
six-month
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a six-month
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period.
In
addition
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addition,
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inquiries
by letter or email had a decreasing trend during the period.
Overall
, in
person
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person,
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inquiries
increased as by telephone did too. In January 2011,
in
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in-person
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person
was the lowest at a figure of roughly 450
whereas
telephone was the highest rating
900
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at 900
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. As technologies improved, the number of
inquiries
by telephone rose from 900 in January to 1600 in June 2011.
In addition
,
number
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a number
the number
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of
inquiries
in
person
had a sharp increase from 450 to 1900 during the period which was more than
a
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apply
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triple.
On the other hand
, amount of
inquiries
by letter or email was the only method which had a decreasing tendency during 6
month
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months
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. From January to March the figure maintained stable at around 750 but it started to fall steeply in April and May as people writing letters and emails declined generally. In June it remained stable at approximately 380.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words inquiries, person with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.

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