The first chart bellow shows how energy is used in average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

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The first pie chart illustrates how

energy

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is spent on the average budget in Australia. The second one displays the carbon dioxide

gas

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produced

that is

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caused by spending

energy

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Overall

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, the two biggest proportions of

energy

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usage

are occurred

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by heating and

water

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heating, whilst the two main sources of greenhouse

gas

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emissions result from

water

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heating and other appliances.

According to

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the first figure, heating has the most households with 42% and it is followed by

water

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heating with 30%. The

least

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last

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two

energy

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usages result from cooling and

lightingwith

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lighting with

2% and 4% respectively,

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refrigeration has 7% of the budget. The second graph shows that

water

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heating and other appliances are the most carbon dioxide producers with 60% in total. Heating and refrigeration processes cause greenhouse

gas

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emissions of almost the same amount 15% and 14% respectively. The least toxic

gas

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is produced by cooling with only 3%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, water with synonyms.

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