The pie charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutirents, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The pie charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutirents, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The pie chart displays the percentages of three different types of
nutrients
, which become unhealthy if consumed too much. In breakfast, both saturated
fats
and added sugar contribute to 16% of the fraction,
whereas
sodium is only 14%.
Then
, in lunch, most of the
nutrients
are around 29% which makes up for the average sodium intake, followed by 26% saturated
fats
and 19% added sugars. Both dinner and snacks contribute to a high percentage of at least one of the
nutrients
. The fraction of added sugar in snacks is the most with 42%,
while
it only contributes to 14%
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and 21% saturated
fats
.
Whereas
in dinner, both saturated
fats
and sodium had a high average of shares with 37% and 43% respectively, meanwhile added sugar is comparatively less with 23%.
Overall
, the three
nutrients
are found less in breakfast compared to other meals. The balance of
nutrients
is seen through breakfast and lunch.
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