Some people think that technology is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor . Others argue that the opposite is true . Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There is
quite
debate Change the article
quite a
between
Change preposition
among
people
that nowaday
technology is increasing the distance between poor and reach Correct your spelling
nowadays
people
. In my opinion, the
modern technology absolutely increased Correct article usage
apply
this
gap.
On the one hand, Indeed, there is
a plenty of Verb problem
apply
the
gadgets Correct article usage
apply
that
is
outcoming every year, and Change the verb form
are
reach
Verb problem
apply
people
just can own
them Rephrase
only own
due to
their wealth. For example
, most of the rich people
today are wearing or owing something expensive like the Iphones
Correct your spelling
iPhones
ot
the new-technology eyeglasses. Correct your spelling
or
Moreover
, there is
a lot of different elite clothes and mind-blowing operations that can Correct subject-verb agreement
are
afford
only rich Wrong verb form
be afforded
people
will absolutely change the
Correct article usage
apply
human's
Change noun form
human
appearence
. These various items and accessories like cars and clothes, Correct your spelling
appearance
increases
the gap between rich and poor Correct subject-verb agreement
increase
people
that
can not Correct pronoun usage
who
effort
those kinds of stuff.
Verb problem
afford
On the other hand
, the poor people
who can not feel these types of pleasures, are to live with technologies that are actually obsoleted and abandoned. In our time, poor people
can not even share information with other people
online as doing
the rich Change the form of the verb
did
people
do. Actually, regarding to
recent technologies, poor Remove the preposition
apply
people
can not even be healed if there are have not enough money for it, poor
parents can not give their children to good-quality schools that Correct word choice
and poor
are giving
the highest level of Wrong verb form
give
knowledges
. Change the wording
knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
For example
, there is the
Correct article usage
a
numerous
number of Correct word choice
large
people
that
Correct pronoun usage
who
diyng
Correct your spelling
die
due to
health issues by
cause of Change preposition
apply
expencive
healing costs.
Correct your spelling
expensive
To sum up
, the technologies
Fix the agreement mistake
technology
incresases
the gap between rich and poor Correct your spelling
increases
people
and sure, rich people
has
more opportunities compared with Change the verb form
have
the
poor Correct article usage
apply
people
. Rich people
can heal, train, and change themselves, and also
can live in absolute comfort unlike people
that
have not any wealthCorrect pronoun usage
who
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