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he chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1975 to 2025 according to United Nations statistics.

he chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1975 to 2025 according to United Nations statistics.
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The graph illustrates data about how many births and deaths occurred in Switzerland based on the figures from the UN between 1975 to 2020.
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 the figure for births experienced a dramatic rise, despite remaining stable at the beginning, the number of deaths decreased, considering a peak, over the fifty years. It is noticeable that
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the greatest difference in the number of births and deaths happened in 2025. From 1975 to 1995, the figure for newborns rose gradually from 1.3 to 1.7
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, despite staying constant at 1.3
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 in the first decade, but the rate of
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 saw a decrease from one to 1.5
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, in 1985, the difference between birth and
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 is in the lowest numbers nearly 1.3. In the years 1995 to 2020, the statistics of birth jumped from 1.7 to over 2.5
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, growing gradually to 3.3 in two decades later
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 the rate of
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 has fallen to 75 thousand people in 2020. The highest statistics for
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 and the lowest figure for birth accounted for 0.75 and 3.3
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 in the
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 year, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, death with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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