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3.With the rise of e-book come the decline in paper books. Some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages for this trend?

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In modern days e-
books
 take a place in many cases, for some it's a good solution.
While
 others still
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 to
paper
books
, there is no doubt that it has advantages and
also
 disadvantages, in
this
 essay I will be showing both of them and give my own opinion on
this
 rising trend. First of all, e-
books
 come for the need of alternative solution to
paper
books
, because of the amount of trees that have been cut to produce
paper
 to be used in the printing industry field. e-book only
take
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it's
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 power from a little bit of electricity,
while
paper
books
 will take a lot of steps to be ready for printing on it.
Also
 digital age already taking its place in
this
 world and everyone is using their phone or laptop to read articles.
On the other hand
,
paper
books
 are still produced in many countries around the globe, and a lot of people love
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 experience
and
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their argument is that recycled
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wood
paper
 should be more effective in helping to reduce
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carbon
 environmental impact.
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 they are saying it's a far
more
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better experience than digital screens, because of the feeling of smooth natural material on their hands. I think using both is fine
,
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 unless the majority of the population are using too much
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wood and have to demolish a lot of trees for them to enjoy reading, we all should be considering the important role of
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 and their huge improvement of air quality in our high infected global warming earth. in conclusion, forests are the leading factor in reducing global warming, so we need to protect them from worthless demands.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • manufacturing and transporting
  • production and disposal
  • cost-effective
  • barrier
  • portability
  • tactile experience
  • aesthetic pleasure
  • adjustable font sizes
  • built-in dictionaries
  • note-taking
  • accessibility
  • visual impairments
  • text-to-speech
  • customizable
  • wear and tear
  • technical failures
  • longevity
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