The graph shows the number of visitors to a variety of art galleries in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and repo fling the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to a variety of art galleries in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and repo fling the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the amount of
visitors
to art galleries in various countries
such
as ( France, The US, The UK, Korea, Spain, and Russia) in the year
of
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2011. The quantity is measured in millions.
It is clear that
,
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Louver
Museum
located in France had the largest
number
of
visitors
compared to the other galleries,
while
Russian
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gallery
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had a low rate of
visitors
. The
number
of
visitors
to the Louver
Museum
was just under nine
million
by 2011. Metropolitan
Museum
in the American United States had six
million
visitors
.
Furthermore
, the
number
of people who visited the British
Museum
had
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the same rate that
the
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Metropolitan
Museum
.
In contrast
, the National
Museum
of Korea and the Museo de Prado Gallery in Spain had an equal
number
of
visitors
at three
million
. State Hermitage which is a
russian
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museum
was just under three
million
.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • fluctuations
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • trend
  • visitor demographics
  • attendance
  • special exhibition
  • promotional campaign
  • footfall
  • gallery capacity
  • cultural attraction
  • art enthusiasts
  • exhibit
  • statistical comparison
  • tourist attraction
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