In recent years, pressure on school and university students has been increasing and they are pushed to work very hard from a young age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In recent spans, pressure on
school
and university
students
has been expanding and they are forced to do hard
work
from their teenage years. I wholeheartedly believe that it is a positive development. Because
students
will gain new skills and
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the worth of money rather than
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their golden time in useless activities. I will support my opinion with arguments in the essay below.
To begin
with,
school
life is the base of any student. If a student
do
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hard
work
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early age, he will
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continuously
developing
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new skills.
School
is the best place for
students
to learn new things and if schools are pressurizing
students
to do hard
work
. There is nothing wrong.
For example
,
students
are forced to do practical
work
on
computer
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in
school
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computer lab.
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stage for
students
to gain computer skills. In universities, often in
last
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year,
students
have to do a lot of hard
work
. Because
,
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they have to do a job
after
this
.
Secondly
, because of
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hard work
,
students
will
knows
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the worth of money which their parents spend on them.
Students
need to understand these things from their
school
life to university life.
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