The graph below shows the population figures of different types of wild birds in the United Kingdom between 1970 and 2004
The figure shows that the index
population
of wild birds from 1970-2004 has different number
from each other Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
species
. The number
of wild birds who still alive such
as coastal species
around 140, all species
around 110, woodland around 90, and farmland
around 60 species
.
Coastal Species
rising
dramatically from 1970 to 1986 meanwhile after 1986 to 2024 Wrong verb form
rose
remind
stable. Verb problem
remained
In
Change preposition
On
other
hand, Woodland Correct article usage
the other
species
have positive
trend from 1970 to 1977, but after 1977 to 2004 continually Correct article usage
a positive
decrease
. Wrong verb form
decreased
Therefore
, Farmland
species
have positive
trend from 1970 to 1977, and after 1977 to 2004 dramatically Correct article usage
a positive
decrease
.
Despite of the Wrong verb form
decreased
number
of coastal species
is the most high
Change the adjective
highest
population
compared to other species
, however
the Add a comma
however,
number
of coastal species
are only 20 species
from 1970-2004. Meanwhile, Woodland spices
have the higher Correct your spelling
species
number
of species
with 33 species
in total, even though the population
is below the standard of other species
. In addition
, Farmland
species
that has
Wrong verb form
have
minimum
Correct article usage
a minimum
species
with total
Correct article usage
a total
19
Change preposition
of 19
species
, also
minimum Correct word choice
and also
population
that life endangered.
To sum up
, the population
of all species
in United
Kingdom tends to be Correct article usage
the United
Stabil
from 1970 to 2024. Correct your spelling
stable
However
, coastal species
remind
Verb problem
remain
increase
each year, and woodland Wrong verb form
increased
species
and farmland
species
decrease.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, number, species, farmland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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