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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The provided graph depicts the changes
of
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 Gross Domestic Product (
GDP
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)
on
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technology
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the technology
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 and
service
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industry
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 in The United Kingdom between 1992 and 2000. In general, both IT and
service
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 industries had upward trends over the year.
However
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, the IT
business
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 was always higher than the
service
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business
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. In 1992, the technology field had just
upper
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 6% of
GDP
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,
while
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service
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the service
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 field had only 4% of
GDP
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.
Although
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,
on
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 1994 and 1996,
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service
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the service
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industry
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 had
rapid
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a rapid
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 increase to more than 6% and roughly 7%, respectively. During
those
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that
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 time, the IT
industry
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 had a slight decrease from
upper
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the upper
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 8% to just under 8% of
GDP
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.
Nevetheless
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Nevertheless
,
technology
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the technology
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business
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 had
a
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apply
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swift growth
on
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in
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 1998 and 2000,
where
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when
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 its
GDP
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 rose to 12% and approximately 15% of
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GDP
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the GDP
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. Meanwhile,
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service
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the service
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business
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 just had a gradual increase, where it ended up
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at
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 just above 8% of
GDP
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.
As a result
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, the IT
industry
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 had a double percentage
from
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of
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 the
service
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industry
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words gdp, service, industry, business with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • components
  • GDP
  • consumption
  • investment
  • government spending
  • net exports
  • display
  • categories
  • largest
  • increase
  • stable
  • range
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • gradual
  • positive values
  • negative values
  • overall
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