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The graphs give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

The graphs give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.
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Bart charts illustrate the proportion of individuals who had a
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 between 2002 and 2010 and the distribution of
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ownership
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 by level of degree in 2002 and 2010.
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, it can clearly seen that every two years
computer
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ownership
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 steadily increased. In 20210 the proportion of
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 who had a
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 greater than in 2002.
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 when the level of education getting higher
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 education raised up as well.
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 in 2002 the percentage of
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ownership
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 was just below 60% and it increased nearly to 80%. It can be observed that when people had better education device
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 gap between 2002 and 2010 decreased. Individuals without high school diplomas used computers more than 40% in 2010, which is nearly three times more when compared with in 2002. High school graduates nearly doubled their
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 ratio in 8 years. College students increased from 60% to nearly 90% from 2002 to 2010. For the people with bachelor's degrees and postgraduate qualifications
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 usage difference is less than 20%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, ownership with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • population demographics
  • educational attainment
  • disparities
  • technological advancement
  • digital divide
  • market penetration
  • socio-economic factors
  • predictive insights
  • statistical significance
  • longitudinal study
  • accessibility
  • affordability
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