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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005
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The table illustrates how the number of tourists travelling abroad changes from 5 regions in 4 different years Generally speaking, it can be clearly seen that the figures
of
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 4 different areas Africa, Asia and the Pacific,
Europe
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 and
Middle
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 East had an upward trend from 1990 to 2005
while
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America's
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one
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fluctuated mildly.
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, the total international travellers
of
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 5 regions
was
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 observed a sharp rise throughout the period. To be more specific,
Europe
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 saw the biggest
numbers
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 of people who went
for
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 international travel over the years. During the first half of the 15-year period, the figures
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 Africa and
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 East rose slightly by approximately 3
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millions
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million
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.
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, a remarkable growth
experienced
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 by around 25
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millions
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million
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 in both America and Asia and the Pacific areas. It is interesting to note that the number of foreign tourists in
Europe
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 soared significantly from 280.2
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millions
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million
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 to 390.3
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millions
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million
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. As for the latter half, the most noticeable changes
was
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 registered in America, as the number saw a minimal decline of a mere 5
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millions
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million
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In contrast
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, there was a gradual increase on average 5
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millions
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million
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 in
Europe
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, Africa and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East.
The
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 similar pattern was seen in Asia and the Pacific, as the figure
of
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this
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 region
boosted
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 by nearly 20
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millions
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million
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Vocabulary: Replace the words europe, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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