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The tables below give the distribution of world population in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give the distribution of world population in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided tables present the history and the projection of
World
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the World
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Population
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 with detailed percentages for each
continents
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continent
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 between 1950 and 2050. It can be seen that
,
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apply
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 most of the
population
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 was in Asia, where more than
a
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apply
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half of the people lived there.
Furthermore
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, the projected number
also
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show
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 that Asia still will be in the first position. In 1950 and 2000, the amount of people
lived
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who lived
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 in Asia
are
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was
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 56% and 60%, respectively. Even though, there will be a slight decrease in 2050 to 59% of
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population
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the population
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. Meanwhile, Africa is projected that it will have a rapid increase in 2050 by 7% to 20% of
population
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.
On the other hand
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, Europe had dropped swiftly to 12% in 2000, where it is
asummed
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assumed
 to have a gradual decrease until
meet
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meets
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 at 7% of
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population
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the population
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.
Also
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,
the
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apply
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Oceania had no visible differences
on
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in
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 the
population
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 from 1950 to 2050. As
the
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a
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 result, it is considered
as
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apply
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the continent with
least
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the least
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population
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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