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The graph shows the number of visitors to a variety of art galleries in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and repo fling the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to a variety of art galleries in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and repo fling the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph depicts the popularity of six museums
in
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millions
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 visitors in 2011 in different countries.
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,
top
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 three art galleries had
significant
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 more spectaculars than
othe
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the
three
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,
however
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 we had one leader with
the
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 extraordinary number of visitors. Looking at the details, the least popular object was State Hermitage in Russia with almost 3
million
 people who observed its values. The hier
nimber
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 of viewers had Museo del Prado from Spain,
wich
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 achieved 3
million
 sold tickets in 2011. Not far from
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previose
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previous
 one was
National
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the National
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Museum
 of Korea which got
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litle
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little
 bit more than 3
million
. The next museums had twice
more
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 visitors each,
British
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the British
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Museum
 and Metropolian
Museum
 with 5.9 and 6
million
respectfully
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.
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 most popular art gallery in 2011 was
Louvre
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the Louvre
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 in France, which had 3
million
 more
prople
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people
 than
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the Metropolian
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Metropolian
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Metropolitan
Museum
had
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • fluctuations
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • trend
  • visitor demographics
  • attendance
  • special exhibition
  • promotional campaign
  • footfall
  • gallery capacity
  • cultural attraction
  • art enthusiasts
  • exhibit
  • statistical comparison
  • tourist attraction
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