The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
The chart below demonstrates the number of
hours
per
day
that Chinese, American,
Turkish
and Brazilian
tourists
prefer doing leisure activities in
Greece
on holidays in 2019's August.
Overall
, it is clearly seen, that Chinese and American people who are on a journey spend most of their leisure
time
reading books,
whereas
Turkish
and Brazil
tourists
use their leisure
time
at the beach Getting back to the details, in 2019's August, visiting places in
Greece
was the less popular activity among
tourists
during holidays.
Moreover
, Chinese
tourists
spend only 1 hour each
day
visiting places in
Greece
while
there are 8
hours
reading books in
day
.
However
, not all
tourists
found book reading the most attractive activity.
For instance
,
Turkish
and Brazilian
tourists
prefer to spend most of their
time
at the beach (5-6)
hours
. Regarding the bar graph,
tourists
from China and America spend only 3 or
hours
per
day
in
Greece
during holiday
time
.
However
,
for instance
,
Turkish
and Brazilian
tourists
prefer to spend most of their
time
at the beach (5-6)
hours
.
To sum up
, most
tourists
' average main activity is actually reading books,
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
is
average
Correct article usage
an average
show examples
of 5.5
hours
each
day
.
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  • leisure activities
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  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
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