The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
The chart below demonstrates the number of
hours
per day
that Chinese, American, Turkish
and Brazilian tourists
prefer doing leisure activities in Greece
on holidays in 2019's August. Overall
, it is clearly seen, that Chinese and American people who are on a journey spend most of their leisure time
reading books, whereas
Turkish
and Brazil tourists
use their leisure time
at the beach
Getting back to the details, in 2019's August, visiting places in Greece
was the less popular activity among tourists
during holidays. Moreover
, Chinese tourists
spend only 1 hour each day
visiting places in Greece
while
there are 8 hours
reading books in day
. However
, not all tourists
found book reading the most attractive activity. For instance
, Turkish
and Brazilian tourists
prefer to spend most of their time
at the beach (5-6) hours
.
Regarding the bar graph, tourists
from China and America spend only 3 or hours
per day
in Greece
during holiday time
. However
, for instance
, Turkish
and Brazilian tourists
prefer to spend most of their time
at the beach (5-6) hours
.
To sum up
, most tourists
' average main activity is actually reading books, that
is Correct pronoun usage
which
average
of 5.5 Correct article usage
an average
hours
each day
.Submitted by berlinastanalll on
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