You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

#hours #study #part #time

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Dear Sir /Madam I am writing regarding

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my working

hours

because I will

study

part time

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part-time

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so I want to arrange my

schdual

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schedule

. I found my timetable very hectic which

prevent

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prevents

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me from focusing on my

study

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studies

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moreover

, the exams will be

after

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two weeks and I want to

brings

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a high marks

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a high mark

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Also

, the university is far away from our factory

that

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I spend 3

hours

to arrive, so the time in my day is very limited. I would choose the night

hours

as you know there

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limited staff members who

working

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during

this

period. If that

possible

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I want it to be from 7 pm until 11 pm, I will compensate my

remaning

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remaining

hours

after finishing my exams. When you approve

this

schedule there will be a space for me to

study

very well,

however

, I will be qualified to manage the metal factory on the second floor which all my

study

about metal shaping.

While

my exam going to be about doing a car structure which

inevetabliy

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inevitably

will

makes

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skillful

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. Yours faithfully Sara Salem

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coherence cohesion

Ensure your sentences flow logically from one to another. Consider using more linking words or phrases to connect your ideas better.

coherence cohesion

Include a clear conclusion that summarizes your request and reiterates the main points.

task achievement

Expand on specific examples regarding how reduced working hours will benefit both your study and work performance.

task achievement

Try to proofread your letter to check for grammatical issues and improve sentence structure.

task achievement

The letter addresses the main request clearly, stating the need for reduced working hours to accommodate studies.

coherence cohesion

There is a clear structure with an introduction mentioning your request and reasons, as well as a polite closing.

Fully explain your ideas

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Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

180 words

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