Your sister has asked you to organize the music for her wedding at the end of next month. Write a letter to your friend who is an amateur musician. In your letter ● ask your friend to perform at the wedding ● describe why he/she would be suitable for this event ● explain how your friend will be compensated if they agree.
Dear Annie,
I hope you are doing well. I'm over the moon to give you the news that my sister getting married next month and she wants me to ask you if you can perform at her wedding.
Well!
You've
a great band team and your team performed with the International Stars. Change the wording
You have
You have got
You've got
Also
, everyone is a fan of your singing in my family .Therefore
, I do not want to ask anyone else except you and it would be a great opportunity for you to perform at her wedding because another
famous Correct quantifier usage
other
artist
like Daljit Dosanj were Fix the agreement mistake
artists
also
invited . If you perform in front of big artists then
it would be a great deal for you to get feedback from professionals as well.
I hope you would
say yes to me because my whole family is a fan of your Punjabi music. If you would like to perform at her wedding Wrong verb form
will
then
we will definitely try to set up your meeting with your favourite artist and I'll pay for our 2 day
trip to Maldives which we planned earlier for next year. I'm waiting for your reply and I hope you will say yes to me.
Best wishes,
Roopkamal Kaur.Add a hyphen
2-day
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coherence cohesion
Try to improve the logical structure of your paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea and should flow smoothly from one to the next.
task achievement
Work on using a precise and formal writing tone, especially for an occasion as important as a wedding.
task achievement
You have successfully addressed all parts of the task, asking your friend to perform at the wedding, explaining why they would be suitable, and how they would be compensated.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and friendly, which suits the context of writing to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite