Your sister has asked you to organize the music for her wedding at the end of next month. Write a letter to your friend who is an amateur musician. In your letter ● ask your friend to perform at the wedding ● describe why he/she would be suitable for this event ● explain how your friend will be compensated if they agree.

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Dear Maninder, I hope

this

letter finds you in best of the spirits and radiant health. I am writing

this

letter to let you know that my sister's wedding will take place

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the

last

week of July. As you are aware

that

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she likes Indian Classical Music

alot

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a lot

therefore

, it would be great if can

perform

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at the wedding ceremony. As a matter of fact, I know how good you are

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Classical music and you

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won a few competitions with your group recently as well.

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, I am very glad to know that you have opted

music

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for music

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as a profession.

Hence

this

occasion will be a perfect place to showcase your talent.

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, I am more than happy to host your group for two days and I will pay a booking too because I want to be a helping hand in your journey to become a successful musician. I hope you will give a thought to

this

offer. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours lovingly, Jatinder.

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coherence cohesion

The letter is well-structured and coherent. Try to make sure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next for an even stronger logical flow.

task achievement

Your language and tone are highly suitable for the task. Continue to maintain this level of appropriateness in your writing pieces.

greeting and closing

The greeting and closing are both apt and contribute positively to the overall tone of the letter.

complete response

You've completely and convincingly achieved the task requirements, covering all points asked in the prompt.

single idea per paragraph

Each paragraph effectively focuses on a single idea, making the letter easy to read and understand.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

172 words

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