Your sister has asked you to organize the music for her wedding at the end of next month. Write a letter to your friend who is an amateur musician. In your letter ● ask your friend to perform at the wedding ● describe why he/she would be suitable for this event ● explain how your friend will be compensated if they agree.

Dear Maninder, I hope
this
letter finds you in best of the spirits and radiant health. I am writing
this
letter to let you know that my sister's wedding will take place
at
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the
last
week of July. As you are aware
that
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she likes Indian Classical Music
alot
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a lot
,
therefore
, it would be great if can
perform
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at the wedding ceremony. As a matter of fact, I know how good you are
in
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Classical music and you
had
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won a few competitions with your group recently as well.
Moreover
, I am very glad to know that you have opted
music
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as a profession.
Hence
,
this
occasion will be a perfect place to showcase your talent.
Additionally
, I am more than happy to host your group for two days and I will pay a booking too because I want to be a helping hand in your journey to become a successful musician. I hope you will give a thought to
this
offer. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours lovingly, Jatinder.
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