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The bar chart show the number of visitors to three Londan Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart show the number of visitors to three Londan Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the annual
number
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 of
visitors
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 to three London museums—
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 Gallery,
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Museum
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, and
Victoria
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the Victoria
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 and Albert
Museum
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—between 2007 and 2012. The figures are presented in millions.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the National Gallery attracted the highest
number
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 of
visitors
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by
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 2012, reaching just over 15
million
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 people,
while
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 the lowest
number
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 of
visitors
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 was recorded at the
British
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Museum
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 in 2008 and 2009, with around 6
million
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visitors
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. In detail, the National Gallery experienced a steady increase in
visitors
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 over the period. Starting at approximately 6
million
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 in 2007, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 gradually rose, with a particularly significant surge between 2011 and 2012, where it jumped by 5
million
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 to reach about 16
million
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visitors
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.
In contrast
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, both the
British
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Museum
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 and the Victoria and Albert
Museum
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 showed fluctuating visitor numbers. The
British
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Museum
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 started at around 12
million
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visitors
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 in 2007 but saw a sharp decline to 6
million
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 in 2008. The
number
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 remained stable until 2011
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 when it spiked to 13
million
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 and
then
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 slightly increased to 14
million
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 in 2012. The Victoria and Albert
Museum
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also
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 began with a strong attendance of around 14
million
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visitors
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 in 2007, stayed stable in 2008, but
then
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 dropped to a low of 6
million
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 in 2010.
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, it experienced a moderate recovery, reaching 10
million
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visitors
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 by the end of the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, british, museum, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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