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This is an IELTS sample answer essay on the topic of a map of a ground floor in a building and containing 3 maps. The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed overtime.

This is an IELTS sample answer essay on the topic of a map of a ground floor in a building and containing 3 maps. The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed overtime.
The three maps above show some changes on the ground floor of a certain building. The changes
was
Verb problem
lasted
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 more than three decades. It can be seen that from 1958 until
present
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the present
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, the number of the
room
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 was
continuosly
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continuously
 decreased. Between
years
Correct article usage
the years
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 1958 to 1984, there were seven rooms. Respectively, four rooms on the left
side
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 and three rooms on the right
side
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. On the left, there
were
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was
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Meeting
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a Meeting
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room
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,
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the Assistants's
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Assistants's
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Assistants'
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office
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,
Secretary's
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the Secretary's
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office
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, and
Toilet
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a Toilet
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. On the other
sides
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side
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, there
were
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was
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Kitchen
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a Kitchen
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,
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a Manager
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Manager
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Manager's
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office
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, and
Reception
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a Reception
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 area. From
years
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the years
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 1985 and 2000, there were
massively
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massive
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 changes. Only one
room
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 that was still
remain
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remained
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on
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in
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 its position which was the
kitchen
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 on the left corner. On
west
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the west
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side
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, there
were
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was
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Living
Correct article usage
a Living
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room
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also
Linking Words
 Bathroom and
shower
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a shower
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. On
east
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the east
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side
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, it was added with bedroom 1 and bedroom 2.
In
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From
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 2001 to now, the
room
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 was redesigned.
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Kitchen
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The kitchen
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 is a
room
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 that never changed over period
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of times
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times
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time
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. Below
of
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apply
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the
kitchen
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, there are
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office
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offices
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 and
flower
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flowers
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.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, on the opposite, there are play
area
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areas
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,
flower
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flowers
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, and gift cards.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, side, office, kitchen with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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