You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university. Write a letter to inquire about the course. In your letter: •explain which course you are interested in •say what you know about the university • explain why you should receive the scholarship

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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letter to inquire about the scholarship program conducted to help
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students pursue their
career
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in foreign universities. I am interested in
B.Tech
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the B.Tech
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course
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and
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I wish to focus specifically
in
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the Artificial Intelligence
course
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. Nowadays, everything
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every sectors are relying on AI tools. So I believe that
this
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course
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will bring me
a
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more
beneficial
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benefits
in my career
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my life. I have searched
lots
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for lots
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of universities which provide the AI
course
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. Eventually, I found a university which provides the two years of AI
course
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with some add on
course
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as part of it. So I believe it will help me
for
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more advanced
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experential
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experiential
learning. Despite the advanced courses, I am financially backward. So I cannot afford
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this
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course
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fees
with out
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without
the help of any
cholarships
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scholarships
. So, I will be grateful if I get a scholarship to pursue my career in my
interested field
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as well as
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in
foreign
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a foreign
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university. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Rahul

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task response
For task response: answer all three parts more clearly. Say the exact course name, say more clear facts about the university, and give stronger reasons for the scholarship.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: make each paragraph have one main idea only. Use simple link words like first, also, because, and finally.
task response
For task response: you answered all parts of the question in a basic way.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your letter has a clear opening and ending, and the ideas are in a fair order.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • inquire about
  • scholarship program
  • foreign university
  • course of interest
  • field of study
  • academic achievements
  • extracurricular involvement
  • career goals
  • unique aspects
  • reputation and ranking
  • faculty and research centers
  • strong candidate
  • support my aspirations
  • pursue my passion
  • enhancing my skills
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