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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. You should write at least 150 words.
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The chart below represents the number of
items
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 transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by different mediums.
Overall
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, the highest
tonnes
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 of
items
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 were transported by road and the lowest
tonnes
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 of
items
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 were transported by pipeline.
Moreover
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, in the Initial
years
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years,
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 the
ratio
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 of transported goods by
water
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 and rail was the same ,
however
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, after some years, the
ratio
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 of products transported by
water
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 increased significantly. To commence with, 70
million
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tonnes
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items
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 were transported by road which was the highest
ratio
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 as compared to other mediums and the lowest
ratio
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 of 20
million
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tonnes
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items
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 were transported by pipeline. The
ratio
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 of transported
items
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 by pipeline was around 10
million
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tonnes
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 in the initial years but after some time it increased and remained at around 20
million
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tonnes
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 till 2000.
On the other hand
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, The products transported by
water
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 and rail were similar around 40
million
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tonnes
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 ,
however
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, with the passage of time the
ratio
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 by rail remained the same and by
water
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 went to slightly more than 60
percent
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per cent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words items, tonnes, ratio, water, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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