Group of people considers that secure life can be provided by bringing back death penalty. I partly agree that restoring death penalty will lead to safer life of society.

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of people considers that secure life can be provided by bringing back
death
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the death
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penalty
. I partly agree that restoring
death
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the death
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penalty
will lead to
safer
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a safer
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life
of
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society. First and foremost, it should be considered as
delivery
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a delivery
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of
justice
. It is very important as each
time
when any crime is committed, social
justice
is being violated.
Moreover
, restoring social
justice
is one of the aims of the criminal
law
.
Justice
is a broad concept. In
this
situation
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situation,
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it can be considered like
penalty
for committing crimes in
case
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cases
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when
character
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the character
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of
crime
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the crime
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is major or atrocity. To that type of
crimes
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crime
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, we can refer
terrorism
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to terrorism
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, diversity and others. They have
long lasting
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consequences and effects and are very dangerous for society and sometimes even for states.
On the other hand
, by bringing back
death
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the death
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penalty
some
economical
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resources can be saved as custody of prisoners in the places of liberty deprivation costs much for the state and in
this
case, it seems meaningless as these criminals will never have
normal
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the normal
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mindset, so it is just a waste of money,
time
and other sources. At the same
time
, sometimes wrong decisions can be made, and their consequences are not incorrigible. These mistakes may occur
due to
different reasons
such
as falsified documents, information, evidence, perjury and other reasons.
Although
courts and prosecutors do their best to reach the trust, enforcement of
law
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the law
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,
social
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and social
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justice
by following procedures, still it
stays
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not an undeniable fact that
crime
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a crime
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has been committed by person X. But being sure that he or she broke the
law
, person X gets
death
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the death
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penalty
. After some
time
, it may be revealed that he or she even was not guilty, but there is nothing to do at all and after all
as
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apply
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he or she is dead.
This
all will lead to lower authority of
law
enforcement bodies. In conclusion, I partly support the idea that restoring
death
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the death
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penalty
for
secure
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a secure
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life as it delivers
justice
, but at the same
time
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time,
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some problems with its application may occur
due to
difficulties in reaching trust and finding
out
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apply
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the real criminal.
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