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The charts below show the change in ownerships of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in housholds in oun country between 1920 to 2019.

The charts below show the change in ownerships of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in housholds in oun country between 1920 to 2019.
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There are two line graphs. The first one represents the percentage of households with three different electrical appliances: a washing machine, refrigerator, and vacuum cleaner. Meanwhile, the second graph shows the changing amount of time spent doing
housework
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 in
hours
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 per week.
This
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 data is presented in twenty-year intervals between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the usage of all types of electrical appliances increased over the
years
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, with refrigerators experiencing the greatest rise in percentage throughout the period.
In contrast
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, the number of
hours
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 spent on
housework
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 followed a downward trend from 1920 to 2019. In 1920, the refrigerator was the least used appliance, starting from zero per
cent
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, but it increased dramatically, reaching over 90 per
cent
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 by 1960.
This
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 was followed by a gradual rise to 100 per
cent
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 within the next 10
years
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, where it remained constant until 2019. Vacuum cleaner ownership steadily rose from 30 per
cent
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 in 1920 to 100 per
cent
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 by 2000. Meanwhile, the washing machine showed a minimal gradual increase, starting at around 40 per
cent
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 and rising slowly to over 70 per
cent
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 across the given
years
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.
According to
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 the second graph, the amount of time people spent doing
housework
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 steadily decreased from 50
hours
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 per week in 1920 to 20
hours
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 in 1960, and
then
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 it declined slightly to approximately 10
hours
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 by the end of the period. In summary,
although
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 the use of electrical appliances increased significantly over the
years
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, particularly refrigerators, which saw the most dramatic rise, the amount of
housework
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 decreased over the 100-year period.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, hours, years, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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