Your sister has asked you to organize the music for her wedding at the end of next month. Write a letter to your friend who is an amateur musician. In your letter ● ask your friend to perform at the wedding ● describe why he/she would be suitable for this event ● explain how your friend will be compensated if they agree.

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Dear Inder, I hope

this

letter finds you well. It has been a long time since we

last

talked. Just a quick life update my sister is getting married next month and she has given me responsibility for organizing music for the wedding. Well, now I am gonna ask you for a very big favour as you are well aware of how crazy a fan my sister is of classical Indian dance. Could you give one performance on her Sangeet night? Please ! Please !

This

will be a complete surprise for her as I know she is not expecting

this

at all. Moving on to the reasons for choosing you is only one that you are the best. I clearly remember my sister telling me once that she admires you a lot for following your passion for dance and making a successful career out of it. If you agree to the performance, which I really hope that you do, I would like to take care of all your expenses from tickets to living arrangements. And we are not fighting on

this

one for sure. Waiting for your reply. See you soon hopefully. Best regards, Simran.

Submitted by kaur75971 on Fri Sep 06 2024

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coherence cohesion

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task achievement

Make sure all your sentences have proper punctuation and avoid run-on sentences.

suitable writing tone

Your letter has a warm and friendly tone, which makes it very engaging.

complete response

You successfully cover all the points required by the task, including the request, reasons, and compensation details.

single idea per paragraph

Your paragraphs are clear and focused on individual ideas, which aids in understanding.

greeting and closing

The greeting and closing are well done, adding a personal touch to the letter.

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

196 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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