The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary scjool types between 2000 and 2009.
The table represents the percentages of students attending four types of secondary
schools
between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
, the
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However
, in the last
2009 years
, the highest percentage
had community schools
with 58%, while
the lowest percentage
had specialist schools
with 10%.
Between 2000-2009, community school's percentage
grew up significantly from 12% to 58%. In contrast
, the smallest proportion out of
100% is specialist schools
. During these nine years
, the number fell reducing from 12% to 10%. Based on the evidence, the
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schools
was
at the same place at Correct subject-verb agreement
were
first,
but after 9 years
it
steeply modified.
The other countries saw a slight decrease in attendance, compared to the greatest Correct pronoun usage
they
percentage
. In 2000, Grammar Schools
had 24% attendance, regrettably
it dropped to 12%, which is the second lowest result. Add a comma
regrettably,
However
, Voluntary-controlled schools
had a better outcome compared to Grammar Schools
.
Throughout nine years
, from 52% which was the highest number at that time, declined to 20%, the second highest proportion.Submitted by amirkhanovaak on
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