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The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary scjool types between 2000 and 2009.

The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary scjool types between 2000 and 2009.
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The table represents the percentages of students attending four types of secondary
schools
 between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
,
the
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all four secondary school type's
result
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results
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 went differently.
However
, in the
last
 2009
years
, the highest
percentage
 had community
schools
 with 58%,
while
 the lowest
percentage
 had specialist
schools
 with 10%. Between 2000-2009, community school's
percentage
 grew up significantly from 12% to 58%.
In contrast
, the smallest proportion out of 100% is specialist
schools
. During these nine
years
, the number fell reducing from 12% to 10%. Based on the evidence,
the
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both
type
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types
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 of
school
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schools
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was
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 at the same place at
first,
but after 9
years
it
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 steeply modified. The other countries saw a slight decrease in attendance, compared to the greatest
percentage
. In 2000, Grammar
Schools
 had 24% attendance,
regrettably
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 it dropped to 12%, which is the second lowest result.
However
, Voluntary-controlled
schools
 had a better outcome compared to Grammar
Schools
. Throughout nine
years
, from 52% which was the highest number at that time, declined to 20%, the second highest proportion.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, years, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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