In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
In today’s world, many countries are experiencing a significant decline in population in rural
areas
because residents tend to migrate to metropolitan regions. Personally, I firmly believe that this
situation could have both positive and negative impacts on the countryside.
On the one hand, depopulation in rural areas
might have some advantages. The first thing worth mentioning is the environment. It could be cleaner because the population density declines. In other words
, the air would be fresher because the number of private vehicles diminishes when people leave their villages, improving the health and well-being of people who choose to stay. Moreover
, job opportunities would scale up because of the shortage of experienced workforce. As a result
, skilled individuals could find high-paying jobs in their hometowns, increasing their income to enhance their quality of life. For example
, in China, the government has implemented policies to encourage people to move from rural regions to cities, which has significantly decreased air pollution in some areas
.
Nonetheless
, there are severe drawbacks when the inhabitants escape from their hometowns to move to modern locations. First of all, it is evident that peasants make up the majority of the population in the countryside. That is
why when they relocate to metropolises, the process of producing staple crops could be slow and disrupted. Accordingly
, it could harmfully influence a country’s chain of food. Furthermore
, leaving rural regions could cause these places to become abandoned, and the infrastructure, such
as buildings, transport, and water supply, would deteriorate rapidly. Therefore
, the trading market would stagnate significantly, leading to a downtrend in the country's economic growth rate. For instance
, Vietnam is experiencing a lack of farmers who harvest coffee in Daklak province. This
phenomenon considerably lowers the quantity of Vietnam’s coffee exports, negatively impacting the national economy.
In conclusion, although
the depopulation in rural places could benefit the environment and offer more job opportunities, it adversely affects the food supply and the economy. In my opinion, governments should regulate and promulgate some necessary policies to encourage sustainable development in rural areas
, such
as investing in infrastructure or moving factories. By addressing these challenges, governments can help ensure that rural areas
remain vibrant and prosperous.Submitted by Mads on
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While the paragraphs are well-organized, a few sentences could flow more smoothly. Use more transitional phrases to enhance the writing flow.
coherence and cohesion
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.